Audience feedback

NAMES	What do you think the basic plot of this thriller is?	What do you think are the key strengths of this thriller and why?	How do you think this thriller could be made even more effective and why?
Jacky	A hit man story	The sound of the telephone builds up tension	Might work better if the hit-man killed Gabe straight after Gabe left the car
Ollie	About a teenager going missing	Suspense building in a calm and controlled way	Less phone ringing, should of cut before second shot
Isabella	The plot is about the teenager knowing too much which triggers the murder	The atmosphere created by the phone ringing, Gabe's emotions displayed makes you feel nervous	Phone rang too long. Gabe shouldn't have been shot or if he was shot, he should of been shot sooner
Angel	Contract killer performs hits	The strength of the thriller is how it builds tension	Possibly a non-diegetic soundtrack or more interacting ambient sound
Victor	Man makes boy drive and then gets the call to confirm man should kill boy	Gun shot looks pretty good	Maybe a more dramatic shot of Gabe being taken to the forest
Ksenia	About the killers life	Sounds of the phone ringing made the audience wait	Less blood in the gun shot or maybe don't see the shot
Danel	About the boy who was shot and the person who was calling	Close ups at the reaction, created sympathy. Ending as the sound of the shot made it effective	Phone call too long
Max	A hit man who has to kill people who have done bad	Not revealing character at first, builds tension	Don't have phone ringing straight away
Anna	I think that the story is about the killer (mike) and why he had to shoot him so the opening is flash forward	Its quite tense. There are a lot of good shots. And the shooting looked convincing	The sound of the phone ringing seemed too long

Overall, common feedback was that our gun shot worked well and look convincing but some people thought that we shouldn't of included the shot of him being murdered as it ended the tension. Another very common piece of feedback was the phone call. Many people highlighted that it was too long and should of ended sooner. On the other hand, many people thought that the extended sound of the phone ringing worked well as it built a lot of suspense and made the audience wonder why he wasn't picking up the phone. Overall I am happy with the feedback and I take on board everything that was said